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Describing a chess game in a novel


Does the following piece have too much dry narration (mundane tasks, moving about)?Clear steps for developing a powerful inner conflictHang on - where's the main conflict?How to develop a more vivid and descriptive writing styleHow to refer to clothes without modern words ? (e.g: t-shirt)Grammar for describing novel plots?Trying to regain writing skills I lost after a writing hiatusConverting/rewriting present tense narratives to past tense gracefully. Not a question about verb conjugationOrdinary writing or Prose: how to make it immersive?Im writing a short story but Im struggling to show the read not tell the reader













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I have a scene in a upcoming novel where two people play a game of chess, and I realized how difficult it was to describe it. The problem is due to the fact that there are many pieces and you can't really tell your readers where every pieces are at a certain point, and you also need to make sure that the location of the piece is possible.



Anyway, here's an excerpt:




Due to the exchange in the centre, Black was in a difficult situation.
White had a comfortable situation against the isolated pawn. White
placed his rook on c1, the usual in this situation, waiting for the
opponent to make a move with his queen. Was this the right move? White
thought for a moment. He realized he would need to move the rook to b1
in case he would need to revert back to the Carlsbad structure.




The problem is it's very hard to understand where the pieces are exactly, and I can't just describe where every pieces are in a particular situation. It would take way too long, so I will probably lose my reader. It's a sort of lose-lose situation and I can't think of any good way to get out of this situation.










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    If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

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    Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

    – Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
    yesterday







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    No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

    – repomonster
    yesterday






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    Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

    – daisy
    yesterday






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    I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

    – stackzebra
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I have a scene in a upcoming novel where two people play a game of chess, and I realized how difficult it was to describe it. The problem is due to the fact that there are many pieces and you can't really tell your readers where every pieces are at a certain point, and you also need to make sure that the location of the piece is possible.



Anyway, here's an excerpt:




Due to the exchange in the centre, Black was in a difficult situation.
White had a comfortable situation against the isolated pawn. White
placed his rook on c1, the usual in this situation, waiting for the
opponent to make a move with his queen. Was this the right move? White
thought for a moment. He realized he would need to move the rook to b1
in case he would need to revert back to the Carlsbad structure.




The problem is it's very hard to understand where the pieces are exactly, and I can't just describe where every pieces are in a particular situation. It would take way too long, so I will probably lose my reader. It's a sort of lose-lose situation and I can't think of any good way to get out of this situation.










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    If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

    – Rasdashan
    yesterday






  • 1





    Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

    – Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
    yesterday







  • 1





    No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

    – repomonster
    yesterday






  • 1





    Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

    – daisy
    yesterday






  • 1





    I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

    – stackzebra
    yesterday













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I have a scene in a upcoming novel where two people play a game of chess, and I realized how difficult it was to describe it. The problem is due to the fact that there are many pieces and you can't really tell your readers where every pieces are at a certain point, and you also need to make sure that the location of the piece is possible.



Anyway, here's an excerpt:




Due to the exchange in the centre, Black was in a difficult situation.
White had a comfortable situation against the isolated pawn. White
placed his rook on c1, the usual in this situation, waiting for the
opponent to make a move with his queen. Was this the right move? White
thought for a moment. He realized he would need to move the rook to b1
in case he would need to revert back to the Carlsbad structure.




The problem is it's very hard to understand where the pieces are exactly, and I can't just describe where every pieces are in a particular situation. It would take way too long, so I will probably lose my reader. It's a sort of lose-lose situation and I can't think of any good way to get out of this situation.










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I have a scene in a upcoming novel where two people play a game of chess, and I realized how difficult it was to describe it. The problem is due to the fact that there are many pieces and you can't really tell your readers where every pieces are at a certain point, and you also need to make sure that the location of the piece is possible.



Anyway, here's an excerpt:




Due to the exchange in the centre, Black was in a difficult situation.
White had a comfortable situation against the isolated pawn. White
placed his rook on c1, the usual in this situation, waiting for the
opponent to make a move with his queen. Was this the right move? White
thought for a moment. He realized he would need to move the rook to b1
in case he would need to revert back to the Carlsbad structure.




The problem is it's very hard to understand where the pieces are exactly, and I can't just describe where every pieces are in a particular situation. It would take way too long, so I will probably lose my reader. It's a sort of lose-lose situation and I can't think of any good way to get out of this situation.







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    If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

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    Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

    – Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
    yesterday







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    No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

    – repomonster
    yesterday






  • 1





    Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

    – daisy
    yesterday






  • 1





    I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

    – stackzebra
    yesterday












  • 1





    If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

    – Rasdashan
    yesterday






  • 1





    Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

    – Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
    yesterday







  • 1





    No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

    – repomonster
    yesterday






  • 1





    Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

    – daisy
    yesterday






  • 1





    I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

    – stackzebra
    yesterday







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If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

– Rasdashan
yesterday





If you want to be evocative, try using the older notation. R to QB1 is still meaningful.

– Rasdashan
yesterday




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Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

– Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
yesterday






Would including a diagram showing the position be an option? In any case, do you expect all your readers to be familiar with chess, so is it an important plot point?

– Thorbjørn Ravn Andersen
yesterday





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No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

– repomonster
yesterday





No, it's a novel meant for casual readers.

– repomonster
yesterday




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Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

– daisy
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Carrion Comfort, a popular Dan Simmons novel, features some chess games.

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yesterday




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I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

– stackzebra
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I know a certain Harry Potter book has a chess game scene, you could maybe get inspired from that. But that's all I know, maybe this could help you.

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I'm finding your use of "Black" and "White" as character names to be distracting. I realize that it's meant to be more straight-forward to use the chess sides as names, but it throws me off.



Give them names, give them genders (different genders is helpful for following things if it otherwise doesn't matter). Why? Because your reader cares about the emotional investment in the game and not the details, unless it's a reader who happens to be a chess expert. I know how to play chess in the casual way many do and I couldn't follow those details.



I suggest you intersperse the exchange with dialogue that describes the positions. "Rook to C1." If it's a formal game where the moves are called out, show it as actual quotes (from the player or a commentator). If it's an informal game, show the moves in italics as a description of the action. Then leave the narrative to describe the characters' emotions and strategy and so forth. This allows the reader to become invested in the moves and to understand them, even if they don't understand them.



(Note: I don't know chess notation and some moves may make no sense, just replace with accurate moves.)




After the last exchange, Hugo's position was a lot more comfortable,
and his opponent's more difficult.



White: Rook to C1.



This was the usual move in situations like this and Hugo expected Lida
to move her queen in response. Had he made the right move?



Black: Castle to A5.



Hugo bit his lip. He should have moved the rook to B1. He could do
it now, it set him up to revert to the Carlsbad structure if he had
to, but he'd lose a chance to move his knight into a more protective
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    @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

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  • @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

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  • @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

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It depends on if you want to be precise or abstract.



If you want to be precise, proper notation (abc, 123) is the way to go, but this may lose your readers if they are unfamiliar with the notation. If you want to be abstract, describe it like the events aren't happening on a board, but as an actual battle that is happening around your players. This can still give the same feeling without being as constrained by the notation restrictions.



That said, it just really depends on what you want to go for.






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    The game should say something about the characters playing it.



    What are you trying to convey through this scene? The decision-making process of one or both actors? The actual action of the game? How they perceive the struggle?



    For example, if the main character is supposed to be seen as experienced, but perhaps not an expert in chess:




    [Char one] didn't expect that move -- the King's Gambit. He had thought [char two] was the slow, strategic sort. This move, though, opened up risks for everyone. [Char one] glanced at the clock. There was no time to ponder -- he moved his queen's pawn to the center, as was his habit.




    If a character is supposed to be seen as highly knowledgeable:




    He opened with his favorite, the Queen's Gambit. If [char two] took the hanging pawn, he'd control the center of the board. From there, it would be easy. [Char two] declined, defending the center instead of taking the bait. "The Tarrasch defense," thought [Char one], "This will be a long game..."




    In neither case am I describing the moves in detail.



    If you want to describe an entire game through an extended scene, in detail, you should explore some completed games and base your scene on it. As long as you're basing your descriptions on a real game, you should have no problem sticking to what's possible.






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      If your reader plays chess, you have no need to describe every piece. They will assume, unless otherwise stated, that most of the pieces are still in their original position.



      Using the names of particular gambits and positions might be distracting. Remember, it is a game between two players and at certain levels, playing the player is important too.




      The pawn exchange in the centre of the board opened him up to an
      attack, his black knight sacrificed for position. Might have been a
      blunder, his opponent seemed more confident. He saw a possible check
      and decided to take it - moving his rook into position at KB8 - he
      liked the old notation. Protected obliquely by his bishop, might just
      pull a win out of this situation and flip it. Unless there was
      something he didn’t see. Reluctantly, he removed his fingers from the
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      Your story must be perfectly readable and understandable by people who do not play chess, do not know the rules, and only know through pop-culture osmosis that there are pieces called 'rook', 'knight', etc. Write with that in mind.



      With that in mind, I probably wouldn't use chess notation at all. Somebody who has never played chess wouldn't be able to read it. Instead, I'd describe the situation, in broad strokes. A player might be forced to sacrifice a piece, or they might suddenly realise their careful plan has a fatal flaw, the opponent might find a way to escape a trap laid for them, or they might be playing an aggressive game, forcing the MC to do nothing but react. Those are all evocative descriptions that do not require the specifics of what's happening on the board, to be understood.



      @Stackzebra mentions in a comment the chess game from Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. It's a good example. The scene is engaging, it's fun, the reader experiences the tension of it, it works. Only trouble is, if you put the titbits of information about the game together, it turns out that not only is there no actual position in the author's mind that she's describing on the page, but she appears not to know the chess rules at all.




      If I take one step forward




      says Ron, the knight.



      This example is great because the chess fails: the scene works despite the chess failure. Exemplifying what is important (the character dynamics, the sense of danger, etc.) and what isn't important (the chess).



      For a different example, I would point you to the videogame Dragon Age Inquisition. While your player-character is walking around doing things, some of your companions banter in the background. And two of them start a chess game. Here's a link to the full dialogue, with added animation, and added overlay of the actual game being played. Incidentally, here the chess does work - they are playing the Immortal Game.



      An example of dialogue from their game:




      Solas: So, where were we? Ah, yes. Mage to C4.
      Iron Bull: Little aggressive. Arishok to H4. Check.
      Solas: Speaking of aggressive. I assume Arishok is your term for the Queen?




      The two characters come from different cultures, their names for the pieces are different. It's a titbit of worldbuilding information that's interesting whether you're following the game or not. Also, note the commentary about a move being aggressive. Again, that clues in the non-chess-player audience. The game proceeds in the same way: it's all audio that you hear while playing, no board before you, so the dialogue must engage you in other ways, similar to how a novel would have to do it. In order to achieve that, every move is commented on, in a way that one doesn't need to understand chess in order to understand what's going on.




      Iron Bull: You've got no Towers. You're down to a single Mage. Too bad you wasted time moving that Pawn to... to... You sneaky son of a bitch.







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        As a novelist myself, who writes fiction about the game of checkers, I find the critical question is this:



        Who is your intended and expected audience?



        Makes a lot of difference in how you handle it.






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          Hi Bob! Welcome to Writing.SE! Your answer would be better if you could expand it: give some examples of how writing for different audiences would affect the way one writes, for this specific question. You say it "makes a lot of difference", but you don't explain how. Also, take a look at our tour and How to Answer pages, if you haven't already. :)

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        I'll answer this question from a chess perspective (I'm a National Master of chess). I don't think the description makes much sense. You indicated there is an isolated pawn in the center and that white is thinking of transitioning to a Carlsbad structure. The only way this could happen is if black has a pawn on d5, pawn on b7, and white can make an exchange on c6 where black could capture back with the pawn. In that case, it's hard to think of a reasonable situation where white would want his rook on b1 (unless I'm missing something). Your reader probably isn't going to notice but it bothers me when I see inaccurate descriptions of chess in media, though this isn't nearly as bad as most!






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        • Welcome to Writing.SE! Please take our tour, if you haven't already. Our site is focused on the craft of writing, not so much on chess. How would you want a chess game to be described in a story you're reading? Note: story, not professional chess literature. A National Master's perspective on that would actually be very interesting.

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        I'm finding your use of "Black" and "White" as character names to be distracting. I realize that it's meant to be more straight-forward to use the chess sides as names, but it throws me off.



        Give them names, give them genders (different genders is helpful for following things if it otherwise doesn't matter). Why? Because your reader cares about the emotional investment in the game and not the details, unless it's a reader who happens to be a chess expert. I know how to play chess in the casual way many do and I couldn't follow those details.



        I suggest you intersperse the exchange with dialogue that describes the positions. "Rook to C1." If it's a formal game where the moves are called out, show it as actual quotes (from the player or a commentator). If it's an informal game, show the moves in italics as a description of the action. Then leave the narrative to describe the characters' emotions and strategy and so forth. This allows the reader to become invested in the moves and to understand them, even if they don't understand them.



        (Note: I don't know chess notation and some moves may make no sense, just replace with accurate moves.)




        After the last exchange, Hugo's position was a lot more comfortable,
        and his opponent's more difficult.



        White: Rook to C1.



        This was the usual move in situations like this and Hugo expected Lida
        to move her queen in response. Had he made the right move?



        Black: Castle to A5.



        Hugo bit his lip. He should have moved the rook to B1. He could do
        it now, it set him up to revert to the Carlsbad structure if he had
        to, but he'd lose a chance to move his knight into a more protective
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          Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

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          @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

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        • @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

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        • @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

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          This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

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        I'm finding your use of "Black" and "White" as character names to be distracting. I realize that it's meant to be more straight-forward to use the chess sides as names, but it throws me off.



        Give them names, give them genders (different genders is helpful for following things if it otherwise doesn't matter). Why? Because your reader cares about the emotional investment in the game and not the details, unless it's a reader who happens to be a chess expert. I know how to play chess in the casual way many do and I couldn't follow those details.



        I suggest you intersperse the exchange with dialogue that describes the positions. "Rook to C1." If it's a formal game where the moves are called out, show it as actual quotes (from the player or a commentator). If it's an informal game, show the moves in italics as a description of the action. Then leave the narrative to describe the characters' emotions and strategy and so forth. This allows the reader to become invested in the moves and to understand them, even if they don't understand them.



        (Note: I don't know chess notation and some moves may make no sense, just replace with accurate moves.)




        After the last exchange, Hugo's position was a lot more comfortable,
        and his opponent's more difficult.



        White: Rook to C1.



        This was the usual move in situations like this and Hugo expected Lida
        to move her queen in response. Had he made the right move?



        Black: Castle to A5.



        Hugo bit his lip. He should have moved the rook to B1. He could do
        it now, it set him up to revert to the Carlsbad structure if he had
        to, but he'd lose a chance to move his knight into a more protective
        position.







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          Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

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          @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

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        • @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

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        • @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

          – Rasdashan
          yesterday






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          This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

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        I'm finding your use of "Black" and "White" as character names to be distracting. I realize that it's meant to be more straight-forward to use the chess sides as names, but it throws me off.



        Give them names, give them genders (different genders is helpful for following things if it otherwise doesn't matter). Why? Because your reader cares about the emotional investment in the game and not the details, unless it's a reader who happens to be a chess expert. I know how to play chess in the casual way many do and I couldn't follow those details.



        I suggest you intersperse the exchange with dialogue that describes the positions. "Rook to C1." If it's a formal game where the moves are called out, show it as actual quotes (from the player or a commentator). If it's an informal game, show the moves in italics as a description of the action. Then leave the narrative to describe the characters' emotions and strategy and so forth. This allows the reader to become invested in the moves and to understand them, even if they don't understand them.



        (Note: I don't know chess notation and some moves may make no sense, just replace with accurate moves.)




        After the last exchange, Hugo's position was a lot more comfortable,
        and his opponent's more difficult.



        White: Rook to C1.



        This was the usual move in situations like this and Hugo expected Lida
        to move her queen in response. Had he made the right move?



        Black: Castle to A5.



        Hugo bit his lip. He should have moved the rook to B1. He could do
        it now, it set him up to revert to the Carlsbad structure if he had
        to, but he'd lose a chance to move his knight into a more protective
        position.







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        I'm finding your use of "Black" and "White" as character names to be distracting. I realize that it's meant to be more straight-forward to use the chess sides as names, but it throws me off.



        Give them names, give them genders (different genders is helpful for following things if it otherwise doesn't matter). Why? Because your reader cares about the emotional investment in the game and not the details, unless it's a reader who happens to be a chess expert. I know how to play chess in the casual way many do and I couldn't follow those details.



        I suggest you intersperse the exchange with dialogue that describes the positions. "Rook to C1." If it's a formal game where the moves are called out, show it as actual quotes (from the player or a commentator). If it's an informal game, show the moves in italics as a description of the action. Then leave the narrative to describe the characters' emotions and strategy and so forth. This allows the reader to become invested in the moves and to understand them, even if they don't understand them.



        (Note: I don't know chess notation and some moves may make no sense, just replace with accurate moves.)




        After the last exchange, Hugo's position was a lot more comfortable,
        and his opponent's more difficult.



        White: Rook to C1.



        This was the usual move in situations like this and Hugo expected Lida
        to move her queen in response. Had he made the right move?



        Black: Castle to A5.



        Hugo bit his lip. He should have moved the rook to B1. He could do
        it now, it set him up to revert to the Carlsbad structure if he had
        to, but he'd lose a chance to move his knight into a more protective
        position.








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          Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

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          @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

          – Rasdashan
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        • @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

          – Cyn
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        • @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

          – Rasdashan
          yesterday






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          This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

          – raddevus
          yesterday












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          Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

          – repomonster
          yesterday






        • 1





          @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

          – Rasdashan
          yesterday











        • @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

          – Cyn
          yesterday











        • @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

          – Rasdashan
          yesterday






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          This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

          – raddevus
          yesterday







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        Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

        – repomonster
        yesterday





        Nice idea! Didn't think about this format.

        – repomonster
        yesterday




        1




        1





        @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

        – Rasdashan
        yesterday





        @Cyn Do you mean castle as the maneuver to get the king away from potential danger (king side castle or queen side castle) or as a less formal name for rook?

        – Rasdashan
        yesterday













        @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

        – Cyn
        yesterday





        @Rasdashan I mean: "substitute actual chess moves for my examples." I was using Repomonster's wording but I don't know enough about chess to know if I messed them up. But I thought rook was the same as bishop...the tall pointy one that goes diagonal. Castle is more stout with a castle tower shape.

        – Cyn
        yesterday













        @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

        – Rasdashan
        yesterday





        @Cyn Castle also refers to the only maneuver in chess that allows one to move two pieces simultaneously. If neither the king nor the rook in question (rook being castle thing) have been moved, the king is not in check (in a situation where he can be taken) nor will move through check, the king can move two spaces over and the rook is brought to the other side. It is a defensive move that helps to prevent check or later checkmate (king has no escape and will be taken next move - game over). The king is never taken as royals disliked the idea of their proxies dying so the game ends there

        – Rasdashan
        yesterday




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        This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

        – raddevus
        yesterday





        This was a great answer, interesting to read the conversion of the text and I think offers the best way to solve the problem. Great stuff.

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        It depends on if you want to be precise or abstract.



        If you want to be precise, proper notation (abc, 123) is the way to go, but this may lose your readers if they are unfamiliar with the notation. If you want to be abstract, describe it like the events aren't happening on a board, but as an actual battle that is happening around your players. This can still give the same feeling without being as constrained by the notation restrictions.



        That said, it just really depends on what you want to go for.






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          It depends on if you want to be precise or abstract.



          If you want to be precise, proper notation (abc, 123) is the way to go, but this may lose your readers if they are unfamiliar with the notation. If you want to be abstract, describe it like the events aren't happening on a board, but as an actual battle that is happening around your players. This can still give the same feeling without being as constrained by the notation restrictions.



          That said, it just really depends on what you want to go for.






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            It depends on if you want to be precise or abstract.



            If you want to be precise, proper notation (abc, 123) is the way to go, but this may lose your readers if they are unfamiliar with the notation. If you want to be abstract, describe it like the events aren't happening on a board, but as an actual battle that is happening around your players. This can still give the same feeling without being as constrained by the notation restrictions.



            That said, it just really depends on what you want to go for.






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            It depends on if you want to be precise or abstract.



            If you want to be precise, proper notation (abc, 123) is the way to go, but this may lose your readers if they are unfamiliar with the notation. If you want to be abstract, describe it like the events aren't happening on a board, but as an actual battle that is happening around your players. This can still give the same feeling without being as constrained by the notation restrictions.



            That said, it just really depends on what you want to go for.







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                The game should say something about the characters playing it.



                What are you trying to convey through this scene? The decision-making process of one or both actors? The actual action of the game? How they perceive the struggle?



                For example, if the main character is supposed to be seen as experienced, but perhaps not an expert in chess:




                [Char one] didn't expect that move -- the King's Gambit. He had thought [char two] was the slow, strategic sort. This move, though, opened up risks for everyone. [Char one] glanced at the clock. There was no time to ponder -- he moved his queen's pawn to the center, as was his habit.




                If a character is supposed to be seen as highly knowledgeable:




                He opened with his favorite, the Queen's Gambit. If [char two] took the hanging pawn, he'd control the center of the board. From there, it would be easy. [Char two] declined, defending the center instead of taking the bait. "The Tarrasch defense," thought [Char one], "This will be a long game..."




                In neither case am I describing the moves in detail.



                If you want to describe an entire game through an extended scene, in detail, you should explore some completed games and base your scene on it. As long as you're basing your descriptions on a real game, you should have no problem sticking to what's possible.






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                  The game should say something about the characters playing it.



                  What are you trying to convey through this scene? The decision-making process of one or both actors? The actual action of the game? How they perceive the struggle?



                  For example, if the main character is supposed to be seen as experienced, but perhaps not an expert in chess:




                  [Char one] didn't expect that move -- the King's Gambit. He had thought [char two] was the slow, strategic sort. This move, though, opened up risks for everyone. [Char one] glanced at the clock. There was no time to ponder -- he moved his queen's pawn to the center, as was his habit.




                  If a character is supposed to be seen as highly knowledgeable:




                  He opened with his favorite, the Queen's Gambit. If [char two] took the hanging pawn, he'd control the center of the board. From there, it would be easy. [Char two] declined, defending the center instead of taking the bait. "The Tarrasch defense," thought [Char one], "This will be a long game..."




                  In neither case am I describing the moves in detail.



                  If you want to describe an entire game through an extended scene, in detail, you should explore some completed games and base your scene on it. As long as you're basing your descriptions on a real game, you should have no problem sticking to what's possible.






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                    The game should say something about the characters playing it.



                    What are you trying to convey through this scene? The decision-making process of one or both actors? The actual action of the game? How they perceive the struggle?



                    For example, if the main character is supposed to be seen as experienced, but perhaps not an expert in chess:




                    [Char one] didn't expect that move -- the King's Gambit. He had thought [char two] was the slow, strategic sort. This move, though, opened up risks for everyone. [Char one] glanced at the clock. There was no time to ponder -- he moved his queen's pawn to the center, as was his habit.




                    If a character is supposed to be seen as highly knowledgeable:




                    He opened with his favorite, the Queen's Gambit. If [char two] took the hanging pawn, he'd control the center of the board. From there, it would be easy. [Char two] declined, defending the center instead of taking the bait. "The Tarrasch defense," thought [Char one], "This will be a long game..."




                    In neither case am I describing the moves in detail.



                    If you want to describe an entire game through an extended scene, in detail, you should explore some completed games and base your scene on it. As long as you're basing your descriptions on a real game, you should have no problem sticking to what's possible.






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                    The game should say something about the characters playing it.



                    What are you trying to convey through this scene? The decision-making process of one or both actors? The actual action of the game? How they perceive the struggle?



                    For example, if the main character is supposed to be seen as experienced, but perhaps not an expert in chess:




                    [Char one] didn't expect that move -- the King's Gambit. He had thought [char two] was the slow, strategic sort. This move, though, opened up risks for everyone. [Char one] glanced at the clock. There was no time to ponder -- he moved his queen's pawn to the center, as was his habit.




                    If a character is supposed to be seen as highly knowledgeable:




                    He opened with his favorite, the Queen's Gambit. If [char two] took the hanging pawn, he'd control the center of the board. From there, it would be easy. [Char two] declined, defending the center instead of taking the bait. "The Tarrasch defense," thought [Char one], "This will be a long game..."




                    In neither case am I describing the moves in detail.



                    If you want to describe an entire game through an extended scene, in detail, you should explore some completed games and base your scene on it. As long as you're basing your descriptions on a real game, you should have no problem sticking to what's possible.







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                        If your reader plays chess, you have no need to describe every piece. They will assume, unless otherwise stated, that most of the pieces are still in their original position.



                        Using the names of particular gambits and positions might be distracting. Remember, it is a game between two players and at certain levels, playing the player is important too.




                        The pawn exchange in the centre of the board opened him up to an
                        attack, his black knight sacrificed for position. Might have been a
                        blunder, his opponent seemed more confident. He saw a possible check
                        and decided to take it - moving his rook into position at KB8 - he
                        liked the old notation. Protected obliquely by his bishop, might just
                        pull a win out of this situation and flip it. Unless there was
                        something he didn’t see. Reluctantly, he removed his fingers from the
                        rook, committing to the move. Why was he smiling?







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                        • Really good description!

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                        If your reader plays chess, you have no need to describe every piece. They will assume, unless otherwise stated, that most of the pieces are still in their original position.



                        Using the names of particular gambits and positions might be distracting. Remember, it is a game between two players and at certain levels, playing the player is important too.




                        The pawn exchange in the centre of the board opened him up to an
                        attack, his black knight sacrificed for position. Might have been a
                        blunder, his opponent seemed more confident. He saw a possible check
                        and decided to take it - moving his rook into position at KB8 - he
                        liked the old notation. Protected obliquely by his bishop, might just
                        pull a win out of this situation and flip it. Unless there was
                        something he didn’t see. Reluctantly, he removed his fingers from the
                        rook, committing to the move. Why was he smiling?







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                        • Really good description!

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                        If your reader plays chess, you have no need to describe every piece. They will assume, unless otherwise stated, that most of the pieces are still in their original position.



                        Using the names of particular gambits and positions might be distracting. Remember, it is a game between two players and at certain levels, playing the player is important too.




                        The pawn exchange in the centre of the board opened him up to an
                        attack, his black knight sacrificed for position. Might have been a
                        blunder, his opponent seemed more confident. He saw a possible check
                        and decided to take it - moving his rook into position at KB8 - he
                        liked the old notation. Protected obliquely by his bishop, might just
                        pull a win out of this situation and flip it. Unless there was
                        something he didn’t see. Reluctantly, he removed his fingers from the
                        rook, committing to the move. Why was he smiling?







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                        If your reader plays chess, you have no need to describe every piece. They will assume, unless otherwise stated, that most of the pieces are still in their original position.



                        Using the names of particular gambits and positions might be distracting. Remember, it is a game between two players and at certain levels, playing the player is important too.




                        The pawn exchange in the centre of the board opened him up to an
                        attack, his black knight sacrificed for position. Might have been a
                        blunder, his opponent seemed more confident. He saw a possible check
                        and decided to take it - moving his rook into position at KB8 - he
                        liked the old notation. Protected obliquely by his bishop, might just
                        pull a win out of this situation and flip it. Unless there was
                        something he didn’t see. Reluctantly, he removed his fingers from the
                        rook, committing to the move. Why was he smiling?








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                        • Really good description!

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                        • Really good description!

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                        Really good description!

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                        yesterday





                        Really good description!

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                        Your story must be perfectly readable and understandable by people who do not play chess, do not know the rules, and only know through pop-culture osmosis that there are pieces called 'rook', 'knight', etc. Write with that in mind.



                        With that in mind, I probably wouldn't use chess notation at all. Somebody who has never played chess wouldn't be able to read it. Instead, I'd describe the situation, in broad strokes. A player might be forced to sacrifice a piece, or they might suddenly realise their careful plan has a fatal flaw, the opponent might find a way to escape a trap laid for them, or they might be playing an aggressive game, forcing the MC to do nothing but react. Those are all evocative descriptions that do not require the specifics of what's happening on the board, to be understood.



                        @Stackzebra mentions in a comment the chess game from Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. It's a good example. The scene is engaging, it's fun, the reader experiences the tension of it, it works. Only trouble is, if you put the titbits of information about the game together, it turns out that not only is there no actual position in the author's mind that she's describing on the page, but she appears not to know the chess rules at all.




                        If I take one step forward




                        says Ron, the knight.



                        This example is great because the chess fails: the scene works despite the chess failure. Exemplifying what is important (the character dynamics, the sense of danger, etc.) and what isn't important (the chess).



                        For a different example, I would point you to the videogame Dragon Age Inquisition. While your player-character is walking around doing things, some of your companions banter in the background. And two of them start a chess game. Here's a link to the full dialogue, with added animation, and added overlay of the actual game being played. Incidentally, here the chess does work - they are playing the Immortal Game.



                        An example of dialogue from their game:




                        Solas: So, where were we? Ah, yes. Mage to C4.
                        Iron Bull: Little aggressive. Arishok to H4. Check.
                        Solas: Speaking of aggressive. I assume Arishok is your term for the Queen?




                        The two characters come from different cultures, their names for the pieces are different. It's a titbit of worldbuilding information that's interesting whether you're following the game or not. Also, note the commentary about a move being aggressive. Again, that clues in the non-chess-player audience. The game proceeds in the same way: it's all audio that you hear while playing, no board before you, so the dialogue must engage you in other ways, similar to how a novel would have to do it. In order to achieve that, every move is commented on, in a way that one doesn't need to understand chess in order to understand what's going on.




                        Iron Bull: You've got no Towers. You're down to a single Mage. Too bad you wasted time moving that Pawn to... to... You sneaky son of a bitch.







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                          Your story must be perfectly readable and understandable by people who do not play chess, do not know the rules, and only know through pop-culture osmosis that there are pieces called 'rook', 'knight', etc. Write with that in mind.



                          With that in mind, I probably wouldn't use chess notation at all. Somebody who has never played chess wouldn't be able to read it. Instead, I'd describe the situation, in broad strokes. A player might be forced to sacrifice a piece, or they might suddenly realise their careful plan has a fatal flaw, the opponent might find a way to escape a trap laid for them, or they might be playing an aggressive game, forcing the MC to do nothing but react. Those are all evocative descriptions that do not require the specifics of what's happening on the board, to be understood.



                          @Stackzebra mentions in a comment the chess game from Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. It's a good example. The scene is engaging, it's fun, the reader experiences the tension of it, it works. Only trouble is, if you put the titbits of information about the game together, it turns out that not only is there no actual position in the author's mind that she's describing on the page, but she appears not to know the chess rules at all.




                          If I take one step forward




                          says Ron, the knight.



                          This example is great because the chess fails: the scene works despite the chess failure. Exemplifying what is important (the character dynamics, the sense of danger, etc.) and what isn't important (the chess).



                          For a different example, I would point you to the videogame Dragon Age Inquisition. While your player-character is walking around doing things, some of your companions banter in the background. And two of them start a chess game. Here's a link to the full dialogue, with added animation, and added overlay of the actual game being played. Incidentally, here the chess does work - they are playing the Immortal Game.



                          An example of dialogue from their game:




                          Solas: So, where were we? Ah, yes. Mage to C4.
                          Iron Bull: Little aggressive. Arishok to H4. Check.
                          Solas: Speaking of aggressive. I assume Arishok is your term for the Queen?




                          The two characters come from different cultures, their names for the pieces are different. It's a titbit of worldbuilding information that's interesting whether you're following the game or not. Also, note the commentary about a move being aggressive. Again, that clues in the non-chess-player audience. The game proceeds in the same way: it's all audio that you hear while playing, no board before you, so the dialogue must engage you in other ways, similar to how a novel would have to do it. In order to achieve that, every move is commented on, in a way that one doesn't need to understand chess in order to understand what's going on.




                          Iron Bull: You've got no Towers. You're down to a single Mage. Too bad you wasted time moving that Pawn to... to... You sneaky son of a bitch.







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                            Your story must be perfectly readable and understandable by people who do not play chess, do not know the rules, and only know through pop-culture osmosis that there are pieces called 'rook', 'knight', etc. Write with that in mind.



                            With that in mind, I probably wouldn't use chess notation at all. Somebody who has never played chess wouldn't be able to read it. Instead, I'd describe the situation, in broad strokes. A player might be forced to sacrifice a piece, or they might suddenly realise their careful plan has a fatal flaw, the opponent might find a way to escape a trap laid for them, or they might be playing an aggressive game, forcing the MC to do nothing but react. Those are all evocative descriptions that do not require the specifics of what's happening on the board, to be understood.



                            @Stackzebra mentions in a comment the chess game from Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. It's a good example. The scene is engaging, it's fun, the reader experiences the tension of it, it works. Only trouble is, if you put the titbits of information about the game together, it turns out that not only is there no actual position in the author's mind that she's describing on the page, but she appears not to know the chess rules at all.




                            If I take one step forward




                            says Ron, the knight.



                            This example is great because the chess fails: the scene works despite the chess failure. Exemplifying what is important (the character dynamics, the sense of danger, etc.) and what isn't important (the chess).



                            For a different example, I would point you to the videogame Dragon Age Inquisition. While your player-character is walking around doing things, some of your companions banter in the background. And two of them start a chess game. Here's a link to the full dialogue, with added animation, and added overlay of the actual game being played. Incidentally, here the chess does work - they are playing the Immortal Game.



                            An example of dialogue from their game:




                            Solas: So, where were we? Ah, yes. Mage to C4.
                            Iron Bull: Little aggressive. Arishok to H4. Check.
                            Solas: Speaking of aggressive. I assume Arishok is your term for the Queen?




                            The two characters come from different cultures, their names for the pieces are different. It's a titbit of worldbuilding information that's interesting whether you're following the game or not. Also, note the commentary about a move being aggressive. Again, that clues in the non-chess-player audience. The game proceeds in the same way: it's all audio that you hear while playing, no board before you, so the dialogue must engage you in other ways, similar to how a novel would have to do it. In order to achieve that, every move is commented on, in a way that one doesn't need to understand chess in order to understand what's going on.




                            Iron Bull: You've got no Towers. You're down to a single Mage. Too bad you wasted time moving that Pawn to... to... You sneaky son of a bitch.







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                            Your story must be perfectly readable and understandable by people who do not play chess, do not know the rules, and only know through pop-culture osmosis that there are pieces called 'rook', 'knight', etc. Write with that in mind.



                            With that in mind, I probably wouldn't use chess notation at all. Somebody who has never played chess wouldn't be able to read it. Instead, I'd describe the situation, in broad strokes. A player might be forced to sacrifice a piece, or they might suddenly realise their careful plan has a fatal flaw, the opponent might find a way to escape a trap laid for them, or they might be playing an aggressive game, forcing the MC to do nothing but react. Those are all evocative descriptions that do not require the specifics of what's happening on the board, to be understood.



                            @Stackzebra mentions in a comment the chess game from Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone. It's a good example. The scene is engaging, it's fun, the reader experiences the tension of it, it works. Only trouble is, if you put the titbits of information about the game together, it turns out that not only is there no actual position in the author's mind that she's describing on the page, but she appears not to know the chess rules at all.




                            If I take one step forward




                            says Ron, the knight.



                            This example is great because the chess fails: the scene works despite the chess failure. Exemplifying what is important (the character dynamics, the sense of danger, etc.) and what isn't important (the chess).



                            For a different example, I would point you to the videogame Dragon Age Inquisition. While your player-character is walking around doing things, some of your companions banter in the background. And two of them start a chess game. Here's a link to the full dialogue, with added animation, and added overlay of the actual game being played. Incidentally, here the chess does work - they are playing the Immortal Game.



                            An example of dialogue from their game:




                            Solas: So, where were we? Ah, yes. Mage to C4.
                            Iron Bull: Little aggressive. Arishok to H4. Check.
                            Solas: Speaking of aggressive. I assume Arishok is your term for the Queen?




                            The two characters come from different cultures, their names for the pieces are different. It's a titbit of worldbuilding information that's interesting whether you're following the game or not. Also, note the commentary about a move being aggressive. Again, that clues in the non-chess-player audience. The game proceeds in the same way: it's all audio that you hear while playing, no board before you, so the dialogue must engage you in other ways, similar to how a novel would have to do it. In order to achieve that, every move is commented on, in a way that one doesn't need to understand chess in order to understand what's going on.




                            Iron Bull: You've got no Towers. You're down to a single Mage. Too bad you wasted time moving that Pawn to... to... You sneaky son of a bitch.








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                                I'll answer this question from a chess perspective (I'm a National Master of chess). I don't think the description makes much sense. You indicated there is an isolated pawn in the center and that white is thinking of transitioning to a Carlsbad structure. The only way this could happen is if black has a pawn on d5, pawn on b7, and white can make an exchange on c6 where black could capture back with the pawn. In that case, it's hard to think of a reasonable situation where white would want his rook on b1 (unless I'm missing something). Your reader probably isn't going to notice but it bothers me when I see inaccurate descriptions of chess in media, though this isn't nearly as bad as most!






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                                I'll answer this question from a chess perspective (I'm a National Master of chess). I don't think the description makes much sense. You indicated there is an isolated pawn in the center and that white is thinking of transitioning to a Carlsbad structure. The only way this could happen is if black has a pawn on d5, pawn on b7, and white can make an exchange on c6 where black could capture back with the pawn. In that case, it's hard to think of a reasonable situation where white would want his rook on b1 (unless I'm missing something). Your reader probably isn't going to notice but it bothers me when I see inaccurate descriptions of chess in media, though this isn't nearly as bad as most!






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                                I'll answer this question from a chess perspective (I'm a National Master of chess). I don't think the description makes much sense. You indicated there is an isolated pawn in the center and that white is thinking of transitioning to a Carlsbad structure. The only way this could happen is if black has a pawn on d5, pawn on b7, and white can make an exchange on c6 where black could capture back with the pawn. In that case, it's hard to think of a reasonable situation where white would want his rook on b1 (unless I'm missing something). Your reader probably isn't going to notice but it bothers me when I see inaccurate descriptions of chess in media, though this isn't nearly as bad as most!






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                                I'll answer this question from a chess perspective (I'm a National Master of chess). I don't think the description makes much sense. You indicated there is an isolated pawn in the center and that white is thinking of transitioning to a Carlsbad structure. The only way this could happen is if black has a pawn on d5, pawn on b7, and white can make an exchange on c6 where black could capture back with the pawn. In that case, it's hard to think of a reasonable situation where white would want his rook on b1 (unless I'm missing something). Your reader probably isn't going to notice but it bothers me when I see inaccurate descriptions of chess in media, though this isn't nearly as bad as most!







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